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You need a native English speaker, or at least someone who is fluent in the language. I could offer you some help in that regard, if you'd like.

We appreciate your kindness, but we are still in the early stages of our game making, so we just focus first on making game assets "like characters, backgrounds and UI" . Although we admit that our english is not so good "it's because we are Indonesian", so for the moment we do not need it, sorry for all uncomfortable and thanks.

- NNaosuke Team

Are you in need of some help with this?

Unnecessarily, we're just lagging behind some games for some game assets due to work out-of-game issues from every staff on our team, sorry for all uncomfortable and thanks.

- NNaosuke Team

Well I wouldn't mind helping out. I have done a visual novel demo but in Tyrano builder Visual Novel Studio. I was thinking that maybe I could give it a try in that and see how it would go? But just so you can see if it's easier for your project. You're using Ren'Py am I correct?

Plus I'm also an inker and flat colorist, so I can help with the art too if needed. 

We appreciate your kindness, But we can handle it this time, and we already have enough teams to work on this project,  sorry for all uncomfortable and thanks.

- NNaosuke Team

No worries. And if you do need help, I'll gladly do so.

The interface looks very well made but the demo is way too short.

First, you should get a proofreader or a proofreading program. I'd suggest using Grammarly as it's free and correct most basic spelling and grammatical errors and if you have money you can upgrade to premium to make it even more effective.

After you have made the game to be at least an hour long, you should post it to u18chan or Furaffinity for some traffic (the people on u18chan are quite mean though so don't take their jokes too seriously).

Your character art looks very nice (Especially the faces) but the body anatomy is kind of strange so I encourage you to look up more anatomy guides to improve

I hope things goes well for you and the development of this game

Thanks for your opinion, we admit, some of our members have some shortcomings, but we we will continue to develop this game to completion, sorry for all uncomfortable and thanks.

- NNaosuke Team

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So... I tried your game and... I want to say something.

I know that it's only early alpha for test, yeah, but... I think that 5 minutes of gameplay is too short even for demo alpha version (played in alpha 0.04). That's only the mini-prologue scene, but I was really "surprised" when the game ended. I don't even to understand what happened.

But if to close the eyes on that... And look into bright and nice future...

I see an awful English. Seriously, it isn't my first language, and I already see many mistakes... That's not good to present product on Patreon with such a quality. I think that you don't even edit the text :( Examples...

"Aww... I thristy"

"Are you oke ?,you look not good."

"W-what wrong ?,you don't like a mineral water ?."

"Ow.. God... ,I be like alive again"

"Nothing,bay the way,take this,you keep thristy right."

"Can I asking somethink ?."

"His gone,but that okey,before is a good talking."

And so many... Almost every phrase has a mistakes in punctuation and spelling. I don't even know what to think... Guys, please, say that you're tried... Agh... Mmmhh... :(

I really want to see more gay furry VN in this world in English... It seems like I overestimated my expectations... Ugh... Just a bit.

Good luck anyway. Hope that that game will improve for the better. Thanks.

Thank you for your comment, indeed still a lot of things we need to fix, so forgive us for the mistakes that we made, but we will continue with this project and repair all mistakes in future update, sorry for all uncomfortable and thanks.

- NNaosuke Team