In my own perspective, I liked it. Even if it's not finished, this visual novel definitely has the potential. Although there were some.. obvious problems:
Grammar - Well that's been clearly noted by some of the people who got this, but since your group is focused solely on other things, it's understandable.
Length of Demo - This one is self-explanatory. Since it's still under production, of course it would be short. But somehow I just felt like something's missing. The abruptness of instantly going back to the menu after a click during a conversation will confuse players/readers into thinking what went on, like "Is there something wrong with the one I downloaded?" It would be nice if you were to put up a message or so explaining that it's the end for now and not let people into thinking they can't get any further when it's not even done.
Despite the downsides, Here are some things I liked about the visual novel:
Diversity - The characters have pretty interesting personalities and pushes me into discovering them more. The fact that each one has a trait the other doesn't gives me the feeling that I have plenty of choices, and that's what makes them special. Even if I've only seen two, that number is just enough simply by seeing their nature.
Design - The grey tabs really give the vibe of a "You're in a modern city" along with the Google+ menu and that improves the game's quality. The ability to see what the weather today is, is just a cute little widget I don't see in other visual novels I've seen. To be honest this actually reminds me of Persona 5, And that's a good thing.
"You get an achievement" - Now I really love this. Saying that you get an achievement after doing or finishing a specific task etc. is just a wonderful idea. I don't know why, but I definitely like this little idea. It's just nice to see all the achievements you've done in the past few minutes, despite it only being one.
Info - Some visual novels can be overwhelming to read because of the lack of explanation. Adding this into the options are guaranteed to help the player avoid vagueness and make them catch up with the story pretty easily.
Art - Lovely. Just lovely. Despite you people being Indonesian, I'm impressed with how you made it seem like it's definitely from Japan. Hands down, applauding you.
Player - I only have four words to describe him. Just. Too. Damn. Cute.
There's not much downsides to it because, as I've said earlier, this novel has the potential, and since this is still a demo. So far I sort of enjoyed it but it kind of ruined for me when it just ended right after reaching the university, since I thought I was gonna meet another
hot juicy husbando stranger to make friends with. (And definitely not make out with. *blush* *blush* *is obviously lying* )
Despite it being short, I'm rooting for this novel to continue. And while you developers are at it, I have a few suggestions you could use in the future.
Sound Effects - Holy moly, this is what makes a novel more worth and interesting to read. Even if it's not much and may seem small, but trust me, small things like these give a big impact. Hovering your mouse on a choice with a SFX makes it blend more lively with the atmosphere, and so that the background music won't be so lonely.
A bit of character animations - Occasionally, it can be a bit depressing to look at your husbando not budging one bit. Just looking at them doing adorable gestures like flickering their ears or blinking makes them feel more alive and worth smooching.
Voiceover - Now this one's optional. Not only is this costly but it's hard to do as well, because finding the right people to do it is not a simple "point and click". But because of how I saw the demo, it definitely needs one to turn it into a beautiful wonderland. If you manage to do this, then. . . just seriously, you guys are the best. (*Edit: Just saw the post on Gamejolt. You guys really are the best. <3)
(Tbh Kuhaku looks so hot 0mg Im gonna die squee!!!<3 <3 <3)
That's my critique on the game for now. To be more frank, I've only seen more positives and barely any negatives at all. The mistakes there are forgivable, so they don't count as wrong. Still, I'm looking forward to this novel! It's upsetting to see that this novel doesn't have that much support.. but I'll be sure to show this to my friends. I hope you have a good day! :)
(P.S. I'm more than willing to volunteer in helping with grammar. You don't have to give me anything in return. Just be the creative developers you always are and do what you must! ^^)